Tuesday, March 23, 2010

Possible story plot.... thoughts?

I've been thinking about picking up yet another hobby, if I can call it that... Throughout my life I've always had a knack for writing. I had a way of taking a small amount of input and generating enough material behind it you could call it a story. I feel that I've lost a bit of that talent over the years due to that thing we call life... work, bills, responsibilities, etc... I want to try and get back into that creative mode once again and begin writing. So for my first composition I would like to pitch a plot to you that has been bouncing around in my head for some time. So far it's thin, very thin, but as I stated above I feel I can turn it into a rather interesting read. Please let me know what you think:

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This story starts out with a very confusing twist. A young man awakens in a world unlike anything he has ever experienced before, familiar yet foreign. His senses are all out of sync; some weak, some strong. The air he begins to breath doesn't feel the same as it used to, nothing feels normal or natural from the tips of his fingers to the souls of his feet. The major problem with this scenario is that he does not remember what it used to feel like at all, all he knows is that it's different. Prior to this point in his life he has no recollection of any individuality; no memories, no history and more importantly no purpose. He begins to open his eyes for what feels like the first time, the light is overwhelming - blinding him as he struggles to focus on his surroundings. Although he cannot make things out quite yet he knows he's not alone, there are other beings hovering over him as if to study him. At that moment he begins to recognize the fact that he isn't standing, he's in a bed. A distant repetitive beeping noise begins to chime in his head as he attempts to speak. Pain from deep within him begins to envelope every inch of him as he lets out a piercing roar. The figures around him scramble when he hears one of them speak, "20 CC's of morphine now! We can't afford to lose another vessel". As quickly as the consciousness came to him it fleeted and the room went dark.

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To answer your question, yes there is much more to the plot so far but what I want to know at this point is this very impromptu beginning interesting at all? Does it spark that "I want to know more" feeling from deep within you? I know it's very little to go on, so be honest. Once I get some feedback I will add some more of the pseudo-story.

3 comments:

  1. sounds pretty good man. I was thinking like an alice in wonderland vibe at first, the my mind went to and alien deal, but once I read the last 2 lines and definately wanted more. Good, Very Good.

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  2. That's pretty interesting actually, I like how you went through all those different possible outcomes! Exactly what I was going for! Stay tuned...

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  3. I can't wait to read more! Very good so far! :)

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